RetroPimp
07-11-2008, 01:52 PM
Well It's my first time writing a script for a Comedy/Action film so I wanted to see how I did. Tell me what needs improving and what doesnt. Thanks for all CC and please dont flame. Like I said, it's my first time trying comedy.
Also can someone please suggest maybe a better name for the movie.
Tales of Techno By Chris H.(AKA Quizcow)
Main Characters: Or’Tis(Tauren), Spice(Gnome), Zorgg(Dwarf), Hakko(Draenei), and Justin(Tauren)
Campfire in Barrens: SCENE 1
Our 5 Main Characters(Heros) are sprawled out by the campfire getting some rest before the big trip to Ratchet. When Suddenly a group of alliance rogues surround them. Spice and Zergg tell them to stop and go away while Hakko watches Druid Movies(LOL you know what im talking about)
Justin “That was close!”
Hakko “Come here guys! This movie is great!”
Group says “No Hakko!”
Justin(That’s My guy. But I have no mic for voice acting) says “Who bought Hakko the Druids In Action Season 4 : Special Edition Box set for his birthday?”
Or’Tis says “Sorry I didn’t know he would be that addicted!”
Zergg says “And how is he getting Wi-fi connection all the way out here?”
Spice says “ Me. A few buddies worked on an ultimate Wi-fi gadget. Gave it to him for his birthday!”
Or’Tis says “ That’s why he’s always on MSN talking about how are Stormwind raid is doing while he does no work.”
Spice nods his head
Zergg says “Well let’s get moving before more hostiles come.”
Hakko says “Wait it’s almost done!”
Spice grabs the laptop and stores it.
Hakko crys and says “Why’d you do that?”
Spice says “Enough druids for you!!”
RATCHET NEXT DAY: SCENE 2
Main Characters Zorgg, Tibbs, Justin, and Hakko
Justin says(With a lovey dovey voice) “Isn’t this nice! The relaxing smell of sea water blowing in with the cool breeze!”
Zergg says “Enough Romance Lover Boy!”
Spice says “What happened to Or’Tis?”
Hakko says “We lost him some time ago when he started flirting with that Night Elf druid..”
Zergg laughs and says “Multi-faction sex?”
Spice says “Looks like it!”
Justin laughs and says “Free beer on me tonight if he doesn’t come home!”
Zergg says “Free beer tonight boys”
Group claps excitedly and dances on the docks while waiting for the boat to Booty Bay
BOOTY BAY : SCENE 3 WALKING ON DOCK
Main Characters Justin, Hakko, Spice, and Zergg
Hakko says “Why are we walking to Elwynn Forest anyways?”
Justin says “I thought it was to kill Hogger correct me if I’m wrong?”
Zergg says “That’s what Or’tis told me. But he’s long gone. They probably ate his liver while they were in Cat form.”
Spice says “Sucks for him.”
Justin Nods and replies “Indeed”
They continue to walk and make it out of Stranglethorn Vale
Duskwood and Westfall : SCENE 4 Walking out of Duskwood and into Westfall
Hakko says “Are we almost there? It’s been two days without my Druid movies!!!!!”
Zergg says “Someone tape his mouth and make him shut up about the druid movies! It’s starting to piss me off!”
Justin says “So basically just tie him to a tree and hope he gets raped?”
Spice says “He didn’t even say anything close to that Justin!”
Zergg says “Was a pretty good idea though!”
Justin Laughs
Hakko says “I have a good idea! How about we play a little game called STFU!”
Zergg says “Who has the tape? He won’t last 5 minutes…”
Spice says “Here you go!”
Scene ends while they are taping Hakko’s Mouth shut and eyes closed. Fades to black.
Hogger : SCENE 5 Getting prepared to raid
Main Characters Hakko, Justin, Zergg, Spice, and Asci
Zergg says “Ok guys get ready for battle”
Spice says “Ok Zergg your DPS and off-tank, Hakko your healer, Justin go ahead and just constant DPS, I’ll be main tank!”
Zergg says “Roger that partner!”
Asci walks in
Asci says “What are you guys doing?”
Group says “Raiding Hogger”
Asci says “Need a hand?”
Group discusses
Justin Announces “Your in!”
Spice says “Oh and now we have a DPS paladin. Go ahead and concentrate on DPS just like Justin over here!”
Asci equips full T6 DPS Paladin Gear
Asci says “Ready!”
Hakko says “After this can I watch my box set?”
Group says “NO!”
Zergg says “Let’s do this!!”
Group charges towards Hogger
Zergg shouts “DPS on 3”
Zergg shouts “1”
Zergg shouts “2”
Zergg shouts “3!”
Spice says “DPS”
Spice shouts “Hakko give me heals”
Hakko is watching the box set
Spice says “DAMN YOU HAKKO!”
Hakko closes laptop and says “I wasn’t doing nothing!”
Spice says “HEAL ME FOR GOD SAKES!”
Hakko Heals while the rest of the group is DPSing
Spice shouts “Zergg take tank spot ill switch over to DPS”
Zergg starts to tank
Zergg shouts “Damnit Justin cool down on the DPS your pulling aggro from me all the time!”
Hakko dies
Zergg shouts “Oh crap! Hakko do you have to suck at everything?”
Hakko over Ventrillo “I didn’t mean to. I just pulled aggro from the trash!”
Zergg shouts “Spice take main tank!”
Spice shouts “Roger!”
Asci says “I’ll rez hakko!”
Zergg says “Thanks!”
Hakko back alive!
Hakko says “Thanks!”
Spice says “HEAL ME!”
Hakko heals!
Hogger down to 5% HP
Spice yells “DPS GIVE IT ALL YOU GOT!”
Zergg shouts “FULL FORCE GUYS!”
Justin gives Killing blow and then does a victory dance and flexes
Zergg whispers “Show-off!”
Justin yells “I Heard that!”
Asci loots
Zergg says “Dang! Only the Shard of Enlightment! Give it to Justin, he’s the closest thing to a rogue!”
Justin says “THAT’S RIGHT BABY! EAT IT!”
WALKING BACK TO Scryer’s Tier in Shattrath : SCENE 6 LAST SCENE!
Main Characters: Zergg, Justin, Spice, Hakko, and Asci
Zergg says “I guess it was pretty good. I mean now that Hogger is down we have the Shard of Enlightment effect enabling us to get into Kil’Jaedens lair.”
Justin says “WHOS YOUR DADDY!”
Zergg says “Do you ever shut up when you get something good?”
Hakko says “No! TRUST ME!”
Spice laughs and says “Expect more gloating soon!”
Asci says “Hey guys! Can I join your group? People tell me it’s so secret you don’t even release the name!”
Justin says “Well we do need another member since we lost Or’Tis. So I guess you can!”
Asci says “Thanks! I’ll look forward to downing Kil’jaeden soon!”
END OF STORY!
Written by Chris H.(QUIZCOW)
Also can someone please suggest maybe a better name for the movie.
Tales of Techno By Chris H.(AKA Quizcow)
Main Characters: Or’Tis(Tauren), Spice(Gnome), Zorgg(Dwarf), Hakko(Draenei), and Justin(Tauren)
Campfire in Barrens: SCENE 1
Our 5 Main Characters(Heros) are sprawled out by the campfire getting some rest before the big trip to Ratchet. When Suddenly a group of alliance rogues surround them. Spice and Zergg tell them to stop and go away while Hakko watches Druid Movies(LOL you know what im talking about)
Justin “That was close!”
Hakko “Come here guys! This movie is great!”
Group says “No Hakko!”
Justin(That’s My guy. But I have no mic for voice acting) says “Who bought Hakko the Druids In Action Season 4 : Special Edition Box set for his birthday?”
Or’Tis says “Sorry I didn’t know he would be that addicted!”
Zergg says “And how is he getting Wi-fi connection all the way out here?”
Spice says “ Me. A few buddies worked on an ultimate Wi-fi gadget. Gave it to him for his birthday!”
Or’Tis says “ That’s why he’s always on MSN talking about how are Stormwind raid is doing while he does no work.”
Spice nods his head
Zergg says “Well let’s get moving before more hostiles come.”
Hakko says “Wait it’s almost done!”
Spice grabs the laptop and stores it.
Hakko crys and says “Why’d you do that?”
Spice says “Enough druids for you!!”
RATCHET NEXT DAY: SCENE 2
Main Characters Zorgg, Tibbs, Justin, and Hakko
Justin says(With a lovey dovey voice) “Isn’t this nice! The relaxing smell of sea water blowing in with the cool breeze!”
Zergg says “Enough Romance Lover Boy!”
Spice says “What happened to Or’Tis?”
Hakko says “We lost him some time ago when he started flirting with that Night Elf druid..”
Zergg laughs and says “Multi-faction sex?”
Spice says “Looks like it!”
Justin laughs and says “Free beer on me tonight if he doesn’t come home!”
Zergg says “Free beer tonight boys”
Group claps excitedly and dances on the docks while waiting for the boat to Booty Bay
BOOTY BAY : SCENE 3 WALKING ON DOCK
Main Characters Justin, Hakko, Spice, and Zergg
Hakko says “Why are we walking to Elwynn Forest anyways?”
Justin says “I thought it was to kill Hogger correct me if I’m wrong?”
Zergg says “That’s what Or’tis told me. But he’s long gone. They probably ate his liver while they were in Cat form.”
Spice says “Sucks for him.”
Justin Nods and replies “Indeed”
They continue to walk and make it out of Stranglethorn Vale
Duskwood and Westfall : SCENE 4 Walking out of Duskwood and into Westfall
Hakko says “Are we almost there? It’s been two days without my Druid movies!!!!!”
Zergg says “Someone tape his mouth and make him shut up about the druid movies! It’s starting to piss me off!”
Justin says “So basically just tie him to a tree and hope he gets raped?”
Spice says “He didn’t even say anything close to that Justin!”
Zergg says “Was a pretty good idea though!”
Justin Laughs
Hakko says “I have a good idea! How about we play a little game called STFU!”
Zergg says “Who has the tape? He won’t last 5 minutes…”
Spice says “Here you go!”
Scene ends while they are taping Hakko’s Mouth shut and eyes closed. Fades to black.
Hogger : SCENE 5 Getting prepared to raid
Main Characters Hakko, Justin, Zergg, Spice, and Asci
Zergg says “Ok guys get ready for battle”
Spice says “Ok Zergg your DPS and off-tank, Hakko your healer, Justin go ahead and just constant DPS, I’ll be main tank!”
Zergg says “Roger that partner!”
Asci walks in
Asci says “What are you guys doing?”
Group says “Raiding Hogger”
Asci says “Need a hand?”
Group discusses
Justin Announces “Your in!”
Spice says “Oh and now we have a DPS paladin. Go ahead and concentrate on DPS just like Justin over here!”
Asci equips full T6 DPS Paladin Gear
Asci says “Ready!”
Hakko says “After this can I watch my box set?”
Group says “NO!”
Zergg says “Let’s do this!!”
Group charges towards Hogger
Zergg shouts “DPS on 3”
Zergg shouts “1”
Zergg shouts “2”
Zergg shouts “3!”
Spice says “DPS”
Spice shouts “Hakko give me heals”
Hakko is watching the box set
Spice says “DAMN YOU HAKKO!”
Hakko closes laptop and says “I wasn’t doing nothing!”
Spice says “HEAL ME FOR GOD SAKES!”
Hakko Heals while the rest of the group is DPSing
Spice shouts “Zergg take tank spot ill switch over to DPS”
Zergg starts to tank
Zergg shouts “Damnit Justin cool down on the DPS your pulling aggro from me all the time!”
Hakko dies
Zergg shouts “Oh crap! Hakko do you have to suck at everything?”
Hakko over Ventrillo “I didn’t mean to. I just pulled aggro from the trash!”
Zergg shouts “Spice take main tank!”
Spice shouts “Roger!”
Asci says “I’ll rez hakko!”
Zergg says “Thanks!”
Hakko back alive!
Hakko says “Thanks!”
Spice says “HEAL ME!”
Hakko heals!
Hogger down to 5% HP
Spice yells “DPS GIVE IT ALL YOU GOT!”
Zergg shouts “FULL FORCE GUYS!”
Justin gives Killing blow and then does a victory dance and flexes
Zergg whispers “Show-off!”
Justin yells “I Heard that!”
Asci loots
Zergg says “Dang! Only the Shard of Enlightment! Give it to Justin, he’s the closest thing to a rogue!”
Justin says “THAT’S RIGHT BABY! EAT IT!”
WALKING BACK TO Scryer’s Tier in Shattrath : SCENE 6 LAST SCENE!
Main Characters: Zergg, Justin, Spice, Hakko, and Asci
Zergg says “I guess it was pretty good. I mean now that Hogger is down we have the Shard of Enlightment effect enabling us to get into Kil’Jaedens lair.”
Justin says “WHOS YOUR DADDY!”
Zergg says “Do you ever shut up when you get something good?”
Hakko says “No! TRUST ME!”
Spice laughs and says “Expect more gloating soon!”
Asci says “Hey guys! Can I join your group? People tell me it’s so secret you don’t even release the name!”
Justin says “Well we do need another member since we lost Or’Tis. So I guess you can!”
Asci says “Thanks! I’ll look forward to downing Kil’jaeden soon!”
END OF STORY!
Written by Chris H.(QUIZCOW)